A Gaara Fanfic

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gaara-is-smexy4596

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Here's my first fanfic. Hope you like it!
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3973700/1/The_Sad_Truth
 
sorry, it was my first fanfic, and i didn't know how to use the editor
 
You need some grammar lessons, for one. Two, like Boom said, space it. Three, make it longer. Four, more original, all you did was add a character to one of the episodes.
 
1.I didn't have any time to make it longer.
2.I don't need grammar lessons.It was late at night,and I couldn't see my keyboard.
3.I have no idea of how to use the freaking editor!
4.I had to do that as a contest piece for my LA teacher, and it was the only thing I could think of.
5.My intention was to add a character to one of the episodes.
6.It was about Gaara's past,and all I know about his past is from that episode.
7.Cut me some slack, it was my first fanfiction!
 
1. Then you should have taken more time to write and publish it later.
2. Yes, you do still need some lessons. Like putting spaces after punctuation.
3. Then learn. >_>
4. And?
5. Well, that's...basic.
6. It's fanfiction, you can make stuff up. :/
7. It's not your first time writing, though.
 
Look, it's not up to you to decide if I need grammar lessons or not, okay? You don't have to criticize everything I write on this message board, and I am not the best writer in the world. Nobody is perfect, and I can write what I want. That isn't considered constructive criticism in my book, it's considered rude. Think about that.
 
Nobody's perfect, but if you're a writer, people expect you to know how to write. To prove my point, I noticed in your last post right there that you put spaces after punctuation.
 
Being belligerent is not going to stop this argumentative discourse. I am not a true writer, I'm just a person who likes to point out the facts. Stop being so antagonistic and get over my mistakes. Your opinion means nothing to me.
 
Sounds like Gaara's past but instead of putting it in his point of view, it kept saying us. Still sounds like Gaara is narrating it.
 
Fhq, I have an idea. Cut her some slack. Do yourself a favor, don't let perfection get in the way of better.

Oh yeah, don't start an argument with anyone here because I will finish it. Get me?
 
BTW, I'm a girl. :lol I understand that, but I was trying to make a point.
 
gaara-is-smexy4596 said:
Being belligerent is not going to stop this argumentative discourse. I am not a true writer, I'm just a person who likes to point out the facts. Stop being so antagonistic and get over my mistakes. Your opinion means nothing to me.
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Using dictionary.com won't make you look any smarter, unfortunately. And if my opinion meant nothing, you'd still be missing spaces after your punctuation marks.
Dart said:
Fhq, I have an idea. Cut her some slack. Do yourself a favor, don't let perfection get in the way of better.
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I was trying to help originally, because, yes, it is good to know how to write before you, well, try. But then she flipped out.
 
fhqwhgads said:
Using dictionary.com won't make you look any smarter, unfortunately. And if my opinion meant nothing, you'd still be missing spaces after your punctuation marks.I was trying to help originally, because, yes, it is good to know how to write before you, well, try. But then she flipped out.
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By the way, I wasn't using dictionary.com. That was pure intellect. It didn't seem like you were trying to help me, it seemed like you were trying to insult me.
 
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